HOW TOO MANY PRONOUNS CAN SPOIL A SCENE

One of the first things done when editing a manuscript is to look for over used words. Usually this means looking for passive words such as was, to be, that, etc. No one mentions the overuse of pronouns, but they can be just as repetitive and overused.

See the example in this paragraph:

It'd been three hours since she'd discovered Patrick's body. Three hours since she'd given her statement to the officer. Three hours since she'd been released from the scene. Three hours since she had seen Josh. She rubbed her upper arms and paced back and forth. The initial shock had worn off, but the chill pervaded deep inside. She had done her exercises to relieve tension. Several times she had been tempted to go out and just run. 10 pronouns.

 Some pronouns can be eliminated by restructuring/ rewriting the sentences.

This is the new example:

It'd been three hours since she discovered Patrick's body. Three hours since giving a statement to the officer. Three hours since being released from the scene. Three hours since she had seen Josh. Josh.. Rae rubbed her upper arms and paced, wondering if a hole was wearing in the new carpet. The initial shock had worn off but the chill pervaded deep inside. She'd tried exercises. They didn't relieve the tension. Several times, she had been tempted to go out and just run. Run until this whole awful thing became a fog--something that had happened to someone else. But no, she was an adult. Adults didn't run. 6 pronouns

What are some of your crutch words? Would you have rewritten this scene in a different way?